Here are 5 premises of novels that I’m trying to pitch to literary agents. Which is more interesting? Which sounds the most appealing? Which needs the most work?
Any feedback on them would be appreciated.
Title: Gods of Mountain
Genre: Epic Fantasy
The ultimate taboo is broken when a priest from the reclusive race of the Lunari teaches an outsider how to use their magic. The outsider decides to use this power to overthrow the tyrant who took over his city and shares his teachings with his old friend, Faulk, to help him. Instead of aiding him, Faulk travels to the homeland of the Lunari to find out how the magic came to be. Upon arriving he learns that the priest who let their magic loose in the world plans to trigger the ritual that has consequences for everyone living throughout the Knownlands.
Title: Shatter Sphere
Genre: Science Fiction
On his way home from school, Matt witnesses a squadron of police cruisers being decimated by a Breaker. He is later shocked to discover that he too has the ability to Shatter objects using his emotions. The organization that controls the city tries to recruit him and Matt decides to join them as a double agent for the Underground, a group trying to fight against the city’s ruling class. His relationship with them and the girl he knows to be the daughter of the organization’s president becomes conflicted when his betrayal becomes public knowledge and a civil war breaks out into the street. Matt must find a way to quell the conflict both in the city and between those he cares for.
Title: The Summoner’s Pact
Genre: Young Adult Fantasy
Apprentice Summoner Nathan is sent on a journey to find the Kairen Key, which has the power to seal the barrier to the world of the monstrous Melkai. With the use of Pact Items, Nathan can summon and command Melkai from this world to fight the wild Melkai that have already come through. His estranged sister is also searching for the key in the hope of gaining power over the escaping Melkai. Unlike her brother, she is unaware that by the time of the red moon the barrier will be broken and wild Melkai will roam freely in the land. It is up to Nathan to reunite with his sister, stop the Melkai manipulating her and reseal the barrier.
Title: Hero’s End
Genre: Contemporary/Military Fantasy
On their mission to deliver a mysterious weapon from Diran to Linth, Fenix and Ryan come across a Diran facility harboring their new monstrous creations. Escaping, they make their way to the port but, after seeing what Diran had been creating, suspicions arise of what exactly they are transporting. It is revealed to be, not a weapon, but a glove with a prophecy attached to anyone who can wield it, bringing death to all that touch it but the one prophesied. Not until he accidentally puts the glove on and sees that he can manipulated water does Fenix realize that this prophecy is about him and brings with it consequences far outweighing their mission.
Word Count: 75,000
Twenty years has passed since the implants that allowed people to cognitively access the internet malfunctioned. This left only a tenth of the population with enough self awareness to be conscious of the decaying world around them. They have become Followers, humans who have had their brain’s gray matter fried and have barely managed to survive with their remaining motor functions. When Dick and his crew of surviving marauders are told that the malfunction was a purposeful ruse of one of the creators of the Neural Operating System, it is put upon them to stop them from manipulating the Followers and allow them to gain their cognitive functions.